Reviews
Keep Holding On
9
First thing I notice-- characters. Too many. Too boring and long for me to read.
I like the mysteries and stuff. I know it will be exciting, with dark secrets when they are at the beach or something. Intriguing. Great plot.
Again, MINOR grammatical errors.
Good detail. Nice adverbs and adjectives. And thank you so much for actually paragraphing and dialoguing (they're probably not words) correctly. So many people don't, and I just want to pull out my hair and scream!
All in all, good job. Keep it up, make sure everything is meaningful, and don't switch POVs too much. At most, three.
First thing I notice-- characters. Too many. Too boring and long for me to read.
I like the mysteries and stuff. I know it will be exciting, with dark secrets when they are at the beach or something. Intriguing. Great plot.
Again, MINOR grammatical errors.
Good detail. Nice adverbs and adjectives. And thank you so much for actually paragraphing and dialoguing (they're probably not words) correctly. So many people don't, and I just want to pull out my hair and scream!
All in all, good job. Keep it up, make sure everything is meaningful, and don't switch POVs too much. At most, three.
Title : 'Dangerous'
Author : Perla1D
How Fast : Take your time babe x
Smut : Nope there's no smut .
Thanks ! And please be honest if it's good then I'm happy ,and if it's awful then okay ,I'll try harder next time !
7/4/14