9

I felt too rushed. First, she meets Harry and is nice, and then he immediately wants her in his class. Then, some stuff happens that I don't want to go in detail in, and bam! Zayn and Jake both like her. Da fuq?

Not many grammatical mistakes. Good formatting.

Please add more details. You can just add adverbs and adjectives.

Just slow down your story a little. Also, there is the typical I-fell-in-love-with-my-teacher shit, but yours is actually good! But if Autumn cheated and broke up with Harry, why would she want him back? And why so obsessive that she'd literally stalk someone?

Keep it up! Remember to slow it down a little and maybe be more realistic. By the way, those cliffhangers made me want to read more. Awesome!

Notes

If you don't like my review, too bad.