The Story Critic
I want to be loved by you
Rating: 8 (8.5)
The story is well thought out! I can tell it took a while to write it! Pretty good!
Positive Points:
The chapters in your story are not to long, and not to short! There are lots of cliff hangers which are REALLY good because it keeps the readers hooked! They are going to really want to know what will happen next!
I like the idea is how an average girl that has a job as a waitress meets one direction but, The one who likes her seems like he couldn't care less!
Negative Points:
Sometimes in the story when I was reading, There were no spaces! for example:
two words like, He said, would be: Hesaid.
It had me a little confused. Also, remember to ALWAYS capitalize after a period.
You may of learned how to do this in first grade but, it is REALLY important!
These are easy mistakes anyone could fix. And remember:
Always double check your work!
Check out I want you to love me here:
http://www.onedirectionfanfiction.org/Story/13796/I-Want-to-be-Loved-By-You/
The story is well thought out! I can tell it took a while to write it! Pretty good!
Positive Points:
The chapters in your story are not to long, and not to short! There are lots of cliff hangers which are REALLY good because it keeps the readers hooked! They are going to really want to know what will happen next!
I like the idea is how an average girl that has a job as a waitress meets one direction but, The one who likes her seems like he couldn't care less!
Negative Points:
Sometimes in the story when I was reading, There were no spaces! for example:
two words like, He said, would be: Hesaid.
It had me a little confused. Also, remember to ALWAYS capitalize after a period.
You may of learned how to do this in first grade but, it is REALLY important!
These are easy mistakes anyone could fix. And remember:
Always double check your work!
Check out I want you to love me here:
http://www.onedirectionfanfiction.org/Story/13796/I-Want-to-be-Loved-By-You/
plz check out my story it's called "inspirational messages" and take your time I don't care when you review it as long as you do thanks so much
3/10/15