Fanfiction: Success & Failure
Story Review For ThinkingOfYou
Like That
********************************************************************************************************REVIEW:
Cover: 1
Originally: It not unique.
Paragraphs: Horrible. You upset me because I warned that I wouldn't even post the review if it was just one long paragraph, I only posted it so you will know my honest opinion
How I feel About the Idea: 0
How You portray your characters: 0 YOU CAN NOT LEARN ANYTHING ABOUT A STORY FROM JUST ONE DAMN PARAGRAPH.
Grammar, spelling, etc..: I didn't even bother to check those.
Some Tips from me ---> to you:
*Start the entire story over. You need to put THOUGHT AND CARE INTO THE STORY. Its NOT unique. We all know she'll fall in love with Harry just based on your summary, which sucked. And the story isn't good.
*Try to be realistic. No one over the age of 18 is permitted to be an orphanage, once you're of age you can be on your own. So you didn't even attempt to make it real life.
*YOU NEED TO START IT ALL OVER AND THINK ON THE IDEA AND WHAT YOU'RE TRYING TO WRITE ABOUT. YOU WONDER WHY YOU ONLY HAVE A FEW VIEWS AND NO COMMENTS, ITS BECAUSE NO ONE WANTS TO READ A PARAGRAPH LONG STORY. Its not professional, and honestly you're not even trying.
Overall: Bascially it sickened me to even look at it. It was unrealistic, unorganized, unprofessional, the idea sucks, and all this that and the other. You should CARE about the way your idea portrays itself and you should CARE about the idea of the story. So just fix everything. PUT MORE CARE INTO IT.
If I were to recommend your story:
Honestly, I wouldn't recommend it.
Please remember to never take anything to heart. I'm not trying to be rude, mean, etc.. I'm just trying to help you out, besides you asked for it! :)
Notes
I was honest, like i said i would be.
This is a great idea, bummed I have too many chapters for review ;(
10/28/15