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When Nightmares Become Reality
When Nightmares Become Reality
Author: CupCakeStylesWithSprinkles
Rate: 1
Your grammar was adequate, but when people are talking you use these quotation marks: “. Single quotes (‘), also the apostrophe, serve different purposes, and there was quite a lot of dialogue but not that much detail. Sure, you had the transition and actions of the people in the story, but the lack of detail bored me.
I also thought that the story moved a little too fast. They just meet, and they’re exchanging numbers. Then, she goes to see them again – by accident – and all of sudden they’re all best friends and concerned for strangers they just met like… yesterday. I’m pretty sure people don’t trust strangers that fast. I mean, I’ve known some people for most my life, and I still don’t trust them (and I don’t have trust issues; they just happen to be really suspicious people).
The plot was confusing because there was no definition to it (there was no set idea for what it is about). The summary is practically irrelevant because there is no definite plot, and when you get to the part of the story, there isn’t much of a deal made out of it and she wasn’t even that big of a character.
I’m not even sure what more to tell you. I didn’t like your story because the main concept of the story wasn’t clear. The title doesn’t fit the summary, and the summary isn’t that important to the story. If you wanted to do an excerpt, make it one that depicts the story and gives it foundation.
Overall, I think you need to plan it out better and give your story purpose. It seemed pretty cool at first, but it just got too confusing and stupid to continue reading.
If you found this review to be disappointing, I'm can't say I'm sorry. As I said, I am a brutally honest person, or so people tell me. If you would like me to take this down, I will, just ask me. Don't bitch about it either; I don't care what you think, I'm just telling you what I think. Don't get mad, you asked for it. Don't rate this badly just because you don't like what I say. But on the off chance you like what I'm telling you, I'm glad you could learn something from me.
Author: CupCakeStylesWithSprinkles
Rate: 1
Your grammar was adequate, but when people are talking you use these quotation marks: “. Single quotes (‘), also the apostrophe, serve different purposes, and there was quite a lot of dialogue but not that much detail. Sure, you had the transition and actions of the people in the story, but the lack of detail bored me.
I also thought that the story moved a little too fast. They just meet, and they’re exchanging numbers. Then, she goes to see them again – by accident – and all of sudden they’re all best friends and concerned for strangers they just met like… yesterday. I’m pretty sure people don’t trust strangers that fast. I mean, I’ve known some people for most my life, and I still don’t trust them (and I don’t have trust issues; they just happen to be really suspicious people).
The plot was confusing because there was no definition to it (there was no set idea for what it is about). The summary is practically irrelevant because there is no definite plot, and when you get to the part of the story, there isn’t much of a deal made out of it and she wasn’t even that big of a character.
I’m not even sure what more to tell you. I didn’t like your story because the main concept of the story wasn’t clear. The title doesn’t fit the summary, and the summary isn’t that important to the story. If you wanted to do an excerpt, make it one that depicts the story and gives it foundation.
Overall, I think you need to plan it out better and give your story purpose. It seemed pretty cool at first, but it just got too confusing and stupid to continue reading.
If you found this review to be disappointing, I'm can't say I'm sorry. As I said, I am a brutally honest person, or so people tell me. If you would like me to take this down, I will, just ask me. Don't bitch about it either; I don't care what you think, I'm just telling you what I think. Don't get mad, you asked for it. Don't rate this badly just because you don't like what I say. But on the off chance you like what I'm telling you, I'm glad you could learn something from me.
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12/31/16