Their Slave - Comments, page 7

dont ruin the story now!!

@mcalanna22
Yeah in the beginning, then Katie and Niall develop feelings for each other

aw semi tiny sweet side of niall there at the very very end. is he going to share her with the guys?

@mcalanna22
Thank you so much!! :) That means so much

so far so good. the quotation marks helped alot too. i like it and its going really nicely

@mcalanna22
thank you for tht, i need criticism to make the story better

this is amazing. i dont know if you want constructive criticism or not but il give u soem. if u dont like it just tell me and il keep it t myself from now on. sorry if i hurt your feelings. its good so far, but i think when you have them talk you should use quotation amrks and starts a new line with each person speaking. itd make all your chapters logner, plus itd b easier to follow

@XxHazza_boo_luvxX
Thank you, i'll be writing more soon

I like the little twist of how their the man whores