Soo, rank: 7/10

Your story is unique and pretty well written, it's very suspenseful!

Although your plot is kinda overused, a bartender getting almost murdered and then saved by Harry who so happens to hear her crys of help.

Other than that, it's pretty good, just a few grammar mistakes, and good use of descriptive language.

Good job and keep writing!!

Love

Nora and Janessa

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Notes

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