Fanfiction 101
Behind The Masks
(1) Try to be more realistic here. What’s unreal? I’ve made a list:
-Teachers wouldn’t be so stupid as to be caught dead finger fucking their students, and it was her first day, too.
-Harry is younger than Zayn, so how is that in the time their band broke up, Harry became a teacher (he would have to get a degree first) and Zayn is still in school as his student?
-No one forgets their heroes. When One Direction breaks up, no one – not even the non-Directioners – will forget the impact of this band. If she can’t remember their names after naming them her heroes, she must have memory loss.
-Who in their right mind fucks their best friend (of the opposite sex) after knowing them for that long? That’s like… fucking your cousin: weird and it’ll just make everything awkward later.
I’m sure there was other stuff I could point out, but I’m sure you get the point. As I said in a different review, make sure that when you write you would believe it’s something someone would do in real life, or state that your story takes place in a universe where you can fuck teachers you just met and it’s not against the law.
If you found this review to be disappointing, I'm can't say I'm sorry. As I said, I am a brutally honest person, or so people tell me. If you would like me to take this down, I will, just ask me. Don't bitch about it either; I don't care what you think, I'm just telling you what I think. Don't get mad, you asked for it. Don't rate this badly just because you don't like what I say. But on the off chance you like what I'm telling you, I'm glad you could learn something from me.
Notes
Yes, I'm 13. Yes, I'm mature enough to say "fuck" and know what it is.
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12/31/16