Fanfiction 101
Amour
(9) At first, I had no idea this was going to be a vampire story… There was no hinting at it until she had that dream and you didn’t make anything obvious. When I got to her dream, I realized what direction you were heading (vampire story), but… I just couldn’t stop reading it.
Your grammar and way of writing is incredible. You were descriptive and there was a nice pace to your story. The plot itself – vampires or not – is amazing. Everything from the way they meet to how he can’t let her go is spot on. There wasn’t a moment that I got bored while reading.
If you had made it obvious that it was a vampire story, I wouldn’t have read it, but I’m so glad you didn’t because then I wouldn’t have been able to read such an amazing story. I love it.
The only note I have for you is to go back and check to see if your chapters got spaced out correctly. If not, go back and fix it. Also, in your summary you said EXTRACT. I didn’t really understand what you meant at first, but then I got it. Replace EXTRACT with EXCERPT; it makes much more sense and extract sounds weird in the sense your using it.
Otherwise, that’s it. Keep up the great work! [Link]
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12/31/16